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Black trains taking us to the unknown-
The dark smoke fills our lungs,
And burns our toungs.

The black smoke of ashes
Disapears into the grey sky,
Where the sun no longer shines.

My name is written,
Not in fancy cursive, but as a criminal,
On the parchment of death's waiting list.

The acid burns my skin,
My lungs burst into invisible flames,
I try to scream, but there is no sound.

One by one, our bodies are seperated from our souls,
Free to dance in the wind-
Fly away to a better place.

Through the wind our stories will fly,
Our messages will stay alive,
Though our bodies have died.
:iconforgetthedreampoet:

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Tell me what you think this is about. I hope you like it.

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:iconjjthedemon:
really strong ending here hun

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:iconbrbtornado:
Awesomely dark without being depressing.

Very nice :)
:iconeclipsemorado:
In your third line instead of toungs its actually tongues, but very nice job! I love it
:iconmaskedeskimo:
its about when the Nazis would transport people for work at concentration camps... Idk i just made a guess since I'm reading Anne frank at school :P I'm sorry if my guess is a bit dark but that's what I think is happening in your poem which is really nice btw and I hope that you come up with more stuff like this
:iconforgetthedreampoet:
Ugh I hate the word tongues because I always misspell it! Thank you.(:
:iconforgetthedreampoet:
Yes! That's exactally right. Weare learning about her at school too. Thanks I am going to try really hard to make a better one like this but with the same theme since it has touched so many people's lives.
:iconforgetthedreampoet:
Thanks! I'm glad you like it.
:iconeclipsemorado:
you're welcome its a hard word idk who came up with how to spell it!
:iconforgetthedreampoet:
Thank you very much! I am really glad that you lie it. You are too kind! Haha.(:<3

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